Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 12:22:05 GMT -5
Attack Against Dream Defenders!
Sending: -Ordinaries: ---2000 Male Sheargrubs (Upgrade: Iron Armour, Beef-up!) ---1000 Female Sheargrubs (Upgrade: Beef-up!) ---1000 Shearwigs (Upgrade: Wooden Carrying Baskets, Beef-up!) ---1000 Dwarf Burrowing Bulborbs --Subtotal: 5000 -Specials: ---200 Mitites (Upgrade: Steel Fangs) ---200 Burrowing Bulborbs ---100 Icemites (Upgrade: Steel Fangs)
--Subtotal: 500 -Supers: ---Momma Shearbrub (1000) ---Poppa Sheargrub (1000) ---Uncle Shearwig (1000) (carrying Emperor Whistle) --Subtotal: 3000 Total: 8500
-Machines: ---2 Flame Slingers (Loaded w/2 Tar) ---2 Sheardigs (One Upgraded w/ Beam of Destruction) Total: 4 (120 Days worth)
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Bulbmin's Troops/Machines/Etc.
Captain: Dr. Jenny
Troops: 1000 Red Pikmin (Have Flamers)* 1000 Brown Pikmin* 1000 Orange Pikmin (Have Repair Packs)*
War Machines: 4 Assault Artillery
*All Pikmin have Pikmin Field Training (80 day project, makes them less stupid without a captain) and have been fed Nectar (100 Days project, makes all Pikmin faster and stronger)
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Latest Dream Defender Logs
Wildlife Army: Dream Defenders Location:Wistful Wilds: Dream den area
Army
Ordinary 4000 White pikmin (pikmin with red eyes. resistant to poison and poisonous if eaten) 4000 Bulbmin (Dwarf bulborbs infected with pikmin. Resistant to all elements.) 4000 pikmin (yellow) ( Yellow pikmin with big ears witch can make them fly high. Can pick up bomb rocks also.) 4000 Red pikmin (Resistant to fire and has stronger attack)
Subtotal:16000
Special 350 Breadbugs (tunneling, hard-to-kill thieves that can drag ordinary units down.) 350 Antenna Beatles(Beatles with a whistle that can control other pikmin for a short time.)
Subtotal: 700
Super Yellow onion Red onion Grand Total: 2300
Petals: starting over 500
Ally: Chocoking Peace Treaty: Naval Kingdom Wars: None
Assets
1. Weapons Storage (Holds troop weapons.) 2. Ammunitions Storage (Contains ammunition.) 3. Resource Storage (Resources are kept safe here.) 4. Barracks (Where the troops stay.)
Resources
1 Iron (Build strength=3. Weak to extreme fire, decent elsewhere.)
Machines
Cannon (2 iron) (A small turret to launch 1 bomb rock at a time with normal defense.)
Base Defenses
2 Pitfalls(Large holes covered with leaves)
Projects
1. Recruit red onion (100/100 days)
2. Recruit yellow onion(100/100 Days)
3.Scout ..... (15/15 days)
4. Create gravity gun (2 iron) (30/30 days)
Log
Fang the bulbmin: Bleh
Bought:Perplexing Pool Scouting: -> Knowledge of armies in the Perplexing Pool area. Final Trial Scout: -> Knowledge of armies in the Final Trial Forest of Hope Scouting: -> Information on armies in the Forest of Hope Valley of Repose Information: -> Learn about this snow covered wonderland and it's armies! Awakening Wood Map: -> Like a bulb springing to life, your senses will cry out with joy in this sensational place! Also included is information about the armies there
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Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 12:32:43 GMT -5
The Wistful WildFrom behind the clouds, the sun's ray weakly illuminated Wistful Wilds. It was a restful place, trees gently casting off their used garments to the northern winds and most creatures preparing themselves for a good sleep. Even with the peaceful relaxing of wariness, the creatures of Wistful Wilds were always aware of a bustling complex near the Dream Den. In the past, explosions was heard in the deep, and now, a multitude of creatures have made a home there, the Dream Defenders. Settling into a nap, a Bulborb soon realized that another group of strangers had also intruded into the sleepy woods. These grubby creatures went up to a poison wall when they ... disappeared? Already overtaxing its mind with this occurrence, the Bulborb shook its head before going back to sleep. (Hopefully you're at 1:43 in the Wistful Wild theme) Inside the Dream Defenders base, there was no time for idle dreams. A monstrous sized Shearwig appeared, carrying a strange implement that none of the Dream Defender had ever seen. Unfortunately, they did recognize what the accompanying Shearwigs were carrying, Blast Rocks. Whistling gently through the air, the explosive killed many hapless Pikmin. The defending Bomb Rock cannon quickly targeted the intruders, but its ammo wasn't meant to be used against such small and agile foes; soon the cannon was reduced to rubbish. Instantly, the defending Onions took flight to take on the intruders. Seeing the threat, Uncle Shearwig took refuge among the swarm of Shearwigs. Firing off its traction beam, the might Onions smashed the insects against its underside before devouring them. Unexpectedly, a few of the Shearwigs hadn't dropped their basket laden with Blast Rocks, stunning the Onions as they accidentally beamed up Blast Rocks. Taking the opportunity, Uncle Shearwig hoisted the strange implement he was carrying, the Emperor Whistle, to his back and buzzed a peculiar tune, enchanting all of the fleeing Dream Defender's Pikmin. The Antenna Beetles tried to drown out the Whistle, but they were simply no match. Playing his merry tune, the Pikmin left in masses, following Uncle Shearwig toward the nearby Poison Gate. As the Shearwig hovered above the gate, shrieks of pain soon joined the hissing of poison gas, a rainbow coloured haze mingled with the purple gas, and Uncle Shearwig's charming tune died away as the Emperor Whistle fell apart into a silvery powder. At the Dream Defender's Base, the battle continued. As the Shearwigs continued to bomb and tackle the defenders, the ground began to shake, like a boiling pan. Lumps of earth began growing and bursting like bubbles in hot water. Popping out these bubbles were Mitites and Sheargrubs of all kind. Upon smelling the Mitites pheremon, the remaining Pikmin went into a crazed frenzy. Equipped with Steel Fangs, Mitites joined the Male Sheargrubs in sinking their mandibles into Pikmin flesh. As always, a few became badly poisoned by the White Pikmin. The Antenna Beetles tried desperately to restore order, but they could only calm the Pikmin, not command them to fight back. A few of the Antenna Beetles were successful in squashing the Mitites, but their effort was weak. Breadbugs attempted to tackle and bite the Shear Force troops, but while they had good intentions, their purpose was simply to steal, not defeat enemies. At the Resource Storage, a mob of Female Shearwig swarmed the building like it was having a 50% off shoe sell. Some Breadbugs engaged in a tug of war over the stolen goods, but one female presence put an end to the fight. Swinging her massive body, Momma Sheargrub smacked away the Breadbugs, each blow resounding like a fist smashing into a dishonest merchant's gut. At the main fight, more disaster struck. Heaving once more, the ground spat up another wave of attackers, Burrowing Bulborbs and a massive Male Sheargrub, Poppa Sheargrub. The large Grubdogs mashed the Antenna Beetles, leading to even more confusion among the defending Pikmin since there was nothing to counteract the Mitites. Even with a Breadbug's defense, Poppa Sheargrub easily sliced them apart with his jaws. In the sky though, Shear Forces' air force was rapidly failing. Demoralized by the great Pikmin guardians, the remaining Shearwigs abandoned the sky as the Onions destroyed all that attempted to attack. Swooping down on the attackers, the Onions was ready to finish off the completely grounded Shear Force army. __________________________________________________ Comments and criticism are appreciated and may do much to speed up the next update.
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Post by tinfoilman on Aug 30, 2008 13:03:23 GMT -5
Awesome job so far! Especially liked the line about the 50%-off shoe sale!
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Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 13:54:52 GMT -5
Part 2"Hey, Jenny, what you say to givin' me a spin on your Artillery?" asked Grub as he popped out of the ground. The Hocotatian scientist's forehead wrinkled as she heard that voice. A nice ally, but annoying. "And what do you have to say about your experience handling machines, Mr. Grub?" replied Jenny as she continue typing into her console. "Why, it's downright frightening how much I know! I've must have spent years staring at 'Weapons of Mass Destruction for Dummys'"! Not listening to Jenny's protest, Grub plopped himself up alongside the scientist and started typing in new calculations with his mandibles. "Hmm, now time to hit the big red button!" The artillery fired, and the shot went wild. Sighing, the Hocotatian watched as the shell veered into a poison wall in the distance. "Mr. Grub, if I may ask, am I right in assuming that your hands-on-experience is equivalent to that of a Biology class during the Sheargrub reproductive unit?" "Well, my instructor sure didn't want any action in class, hee hee." Grub giggled. "Exactly, you have no experience using these machine. Please remove yourself ... NOW!" "Fine I'll just go use ... my BETTER machines. Yeah!" Dr. Jenny continued to ignore Grub as he went over to his machines, huffing indignantly along the way. Having heard Grub's shot, the Shear Force army began burrowing madly underground, dragging all they could with them. After knocking away the few last Pikmin, Poppa Sheargrub dove back underground ... only to find himself raising instead! A Red Onion had locked onto the Sheargrub. After bashing Poppa against itself, the Onion threw him back as a crumpled heap on the ground. With the Mitites gone, the surviving Pikmin swarmed over Poppa, pummeling his body. The wind picked up. Some of the Dream Defender Pikmin scattered as they sought a foothold. The Onion noticed though, that it wasn't any ordinary wind, but one from the beating of wings. Uncle Shearwig tackled the Onion out of the way. Buzzing toward Poppa Sheargrub, he blew away the attacking Pikmin, but had to immediately leave after that. It was no longer safe. With the last hope that Poppa Sheargrub could fend for himself, Uncle flew off to meet the surviving Shear Force. Scorched Earth"It is time to gather some field data on the effectiveness of current Trailblazer's tactics. Execute program: Scorched Earth!" With Jenny's calm command, the Assault Artillery let loosed their devilish fury on the earth. Artillery Shells smashed against buildings, toppling them, then grinding them back into the dust. The Shreardigs joined in, pounding the building's foundation with Blast Rock. With a dying groan, the extra Petal Gathering Center fell, scarring the earth as its falling frame scratched a deep gash across the ground. What didn't fall burned. Thick globs of burning tar caught on Pikmin, drowning them while burning them. Even the two Onions were no match for these unnatural weapon. Seeing the Onions, the Sheardig blasted it with the Beam of Destruction, searing one Onion completely through. As its body fell to the ground, the Sheargrubs cheered to see one more symbol of the oppressive Pikmin destroyed. The Dream Defenders, with no choice left, fled. Their ally must have received news of this catastrophe by now. With another hand, maybe the attackers could be defeated at another time. The only thing left behind was the entrance to the cavern, Dream Den. Countless fire still burned, scarring the earth as copious clouds of smoke blacken the sky. Falling rain soon fell and extinguished the fire. Collecting in the gaping wounds inflicted by artillery shells and bombs upon the earth, pools of water reflected the falling sun. _________________________________________________ Casualties:Shear Force:400 Male Sheargrubs 200 Female Sheargrubs 900 Shearwigs 800 Dwarf Burrowing Bulborbs 30 Icemites 20 Mitites 20 Burrowing Bulborbs Poppa Sheargrub Emperor Whistle (Spent) Laser Beam of Destruction (3/5 shots remaining) Trailblazer Troops:None Dream Defenders:3,500 White Pikmin 2,000 Bulbmin 3,200 Red Pikmin 3,300 Yellow Pikmin 200 Antenna Beetles 75 Breadbugs Yellow Onion Bomb Rock Cannon (20 day rebuild) Petal Gathering Center (? rebuild) Barracks (4 day rebuild) Resource Storage (4 day rebuild) Ammo. Storage (4 day rebuild) Weapon Storage (4 day rebuild) `````` Gain:Shear Force:1 Iron 500 Petals Dream Defenders1,000 Red Pikmin _________________________________________________ Comments and criticism? I want to know about the song, yay or nay?
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Meowzer
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Post by Meowzer on Aug 30, 2008 14:22:16 GMT -5
I'm a bit confused. Jenny was a hoc, so why didn't she kill the sheargrub? And why was she firing at her own buildings?
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Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 14:23:28 GMT -5
I'm a bit confused. Jenny was a hoc, so why didn't she kill the sheargrub? And why was she firing at her own buildings? She's allied with the Shear Force army.
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Post by Meowzer on Aug 30, 2008 14:26:14 GMT -5
Oh.
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Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 14:30:36 GMT -5
And to explain any other questions that can come up?
1. What about the Dream Defenders' pitfall trap? They didn't show up.
Since all of the Shear Force army can dig, falling into a hole won't do anything.
2. Why didn't the Chocomin army arrive to help?
They're too far away. If it takes several days for Shear Force to arrive, it'll also take a few days for the Chocomin army to arrive.
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Post by tinfoilman on Aug 30, 2008 14:31:31 GMT -5
Sweet! A successful attack, if I do say so myself. I like how you portrayed the relationship between Jenny (a Hocotation) and Grub (a Wildlife leader). I think it accurately portrays the relationship between the natural world and the unnatural (aliens, if you will). The Hocotations have a certain... er, superior air to them, and how this is just a mission to them, while the Wildlife have a "let's kill things!" mentality.
Very good writing, and the music was fitting as well. No problems here, although I must admit I'm dissapointed to see Poppa go. No matter! We will avenge his loss!
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Post by Meowzer on Aug 30, 2008 14:32:54 GMT -5
Did dream defenders send plans?
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Hachi
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Post by Hachi on Aug 30, 2008 14:37:41 GMT -5
When Fang didn't send in his plans, I asked his ally, Chocomin to do so for him. Otherwise, it would have been complete destruction and Poppa Sheargrub would have survived.
But, erm, Tinfoilman, did you get the joke with Jenny and Grub? Not that I should be using that kind of humor.
EDIT: And for anyone wondering about the high casualites, most of Tinfoil's troops were excellent at beating Pikmin. 500 Special Mitites is like 5,000 normal Mitites. That would really throw Pikmin into a panic. The Emperor Whistle also helped a lot. And also, the upgrades for the Sheargrub/wigs reduced casaulties (That's why the Dwarf Burrowing Bulborbs took more deaths).
Also, Onions give 10 Pikmin for each of its day. So, a 100 day Onion yields 1,000 Pikmin after battle. WD approved.
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bulbmin
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Post by bulbmin on Aug 30, 2008 14:55:27 GMT -5
Hey, great battle writing there. That was pretty epic! I like how you gave Jenny some real personality too.
Also, tin, would you mind sharing some loot with me? I could do with some Petals.
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Post by Water Dumple on Aug 30, 2008 17:11:33 GMT -5
Well, very well-written, as I already told you in PMs when you accidentally--Well, let's not go into that. Anyhow, good writing, transition, and all that. Just remember that you ought to use a little more music in battles, as one or two tracks won't last and fit the situations the whole time. But, little matter, as the writing was good enough to sustain the whole thing on its own. And as to the joke, it's not that it matters whether it's "Appropriate or not," it's just that sexual jokes are stupid.
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Post by tinfoilman on Aug 30, 2008 19:32:30 GMT -5
Innuendo? IN-YOUR-END-O!
@bulbmin: 50-50 split sound good? 250 Petals for both of us and I take the iron?
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Post by bulbmin on Aug 31, 2008 11:12:34 GMT -5
Thats fine with me tin, I'll update my logs. Thanks!
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